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Nowadays, some people believe advertising is useful and informative. Others believe advertising gives false information about the products and increase the price of goods.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #information #products #price #goods
In spite of the fact that
world
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 is undergoing various changes in recent
year
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years
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, business remains the most heatedly discussed
issues
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issue
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, especially the
one
 related to advertising. Some people argue that advertising is conducive to
capture
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capturing
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the
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useful and informative
information
, while others believe that not only
advertising
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does advertising
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gives
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give
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 false
information
 but
also
 raises the price of commodities. From my perspective, advertising
have
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 pros and cons. When it comes to
merits
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the merits
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 of advertising, there is no doubt that it provides us
a
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variety of useful
information
 for our reference. It can be divided into television ads, internet ads and market-oriented ads and so on. When individuals
looking
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 for the products
what
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that
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 they
needs
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, they
are usually tend
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 to look
a
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commodity ad because it can show you a comprehensive introduction of goods, which may help you place an order without
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. So,
these
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this
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 informative advertising
is do
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 good for shopping.
However
, every coin has two sides. When we browse the internet, some websites will
pops
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 up the false
information
of
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about
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 products which may deceive you,
also
 with the growth of
price
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the price
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.
For example
, when the young or the aged
surfs
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the
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 shopping website like Amazon in order to purchase provisions, the pictures or videos of food are not the same as the real
one
 at all. It is obvious that the public will be deceived by
these false
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this false information
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information
, thereby spending redundant money on it. Given the above argument, it is reasonable to conclude that advertising is a double-edged sword which
exert
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 profound influence for either good or harm on
the
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internet users. What’s more, everyone should learn to distinguish the false
one
 from the real
one
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer awareness
  • persuasive techniques
  • emotional appeal
  • misleading advertisements
  • informed purchasing decisions
  • exaggeration
  • competition
  • innovation
  • higher price
  • product quality
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