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The number of people interested in cosmetic surgery is increasing in order to improve their physical appearance. Why do people do operations to change their appearance? Do you think it is a positive or negative development

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As technology advances, the demand for beauty is growing. The advantage of mic
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surgery
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 is to help
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 with defects and sequelae after accidents, but
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surgery
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 can have a negative impact on the community when some
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 are too abusive and can harm themselves.
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surgery
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 is bad. It helps
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 with defects
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 and improves beauty and spirit.
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, a person who has an ugly or defective appearance and is very self-deprecating in society, but after many surgeries that person has a good appearance and feels confident with
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,
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surgery
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 has many disadvantages.
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, the cost of
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 is extremely expensive.
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, it has a huge impact on health. Many
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 abuse
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 without following the doctor's advice.
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, many
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 still have
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 at unscrupulous facilities.
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, their bodies deform. In conclusion, the abuse of cosmetic
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 is extremely harmful. but
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 very important because it helps
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 with abnormal appearance to become normal
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