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Some feel that school uniforms make schools safer for students, create a "level playing field" that reduces socioeconomic disparities and encourage children to focus on their studies rather than their clothes. Others say school uniforms infringe upon students' right to express their individuality, have no positive effect on behavior and academic achievement. Discuss both sides & give your opinion. Write at least 250 words.

#feel #school #uniforms #schools #students #level #field #disparities #children #focus #studies #clothes #right #individuality #effect #behavior #achievement
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Although
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code
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academic
achademic
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academic
 score and it will kill their
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individuality
 in the schools , some are opposing it because
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amgust
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students
. It will kill the socio dis-similarity in the
school
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view. On the one hand, there are some people who dost not want to
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dress
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a dress
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the
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school
. As per
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 it kills one's
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individuality
, there
choise
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choice
 of
carring
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carrying
carving
 their own style. It stops them to show
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 class and choice of outfits.
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conscious
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bur
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 he is not getting
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 to wear all that he or she wants.
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 concur
school
 is not the place where you will show your class or
ypour
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your
 standard,
this
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students
 are equal to the teacher.
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 having
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code
 is something which will not humiliate those who can not afford Branded attire. Uniform means dressing equally
,
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 so that
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nobody
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no body
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nobody
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 feels any
diffrence
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difference
different
differences
 and focus on their study. It breaks the social barriers too. In some
families
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students
 are allowed to wear short clothes but some families are very strict on their social values. So they
wont
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 to
it
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, but
school
 is the place where each student
wear
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same
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the same
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 uniform so that
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nobody
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no body
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nobody
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 can assume or have any opinion about your class. In my
opinion
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 having
Dress
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code
 is a vital part of the studies, it teaches us to behave equally with others and not
being
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partinal
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partial
 to anyone. It helps
students
 to focus on their studies rather than
clothes
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on clothes
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