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Many cities have become less pleasant places to live in recent years. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Nowadays, many people claim that living in a chaotic
city
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 has become a nightmare. There are a lot of reasons to believe that exist fewer pleasant
cities
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 to live in all around the world. In
this
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 essay I will argue the causes and
also
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 I would give solutions to
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 enormous problem.
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 of all, it is true to say that there are different causes that can affect the perspective of a person living in that
city
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.
For example
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, in my
opinion
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 the main cause of the population does not want to live in these
cities
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 is because of the criminality rate. There are many
cities
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 like mine La Paz -Bolivia, which is considered one of the most dangerous places in Latin America because of all robberies that occur at night. Apart from that, another cause could be bad disposal of
garbage
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, which in consequence is starting to smell. Clearly, these
actions
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 can affect the thinking of the citizens. Fortunately, these
actions
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 like criminality rate and the bad disposal of
garbage
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 can be solutional in order to create a better
city
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 to live
.
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 From my perspective, the government can implement more light poles all over around in the
city
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, so
this
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 can increment the feeling of safety when one is walking at night.
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, bad disposal of
garbage
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 can
also
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 be easily solucionated. The community should have a habit of recycling,
in other words
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, separate different types of
garbage
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 into different containers. To sum up, little
actions
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 and small solutions can increase the possibility of people wanting to live in these
cities
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. In conclusion, I showed that every
city
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 has its disadvantages but with attitude and small
actions
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 it is possible to become an unpleasant
city
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 into a pleasant
city
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 to live in.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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