Many cities have become less pleasant places to live in recent years. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Nowadays, many people claim that living in a chaotic
city
has become a nightmare. There are a lot of reasons to believe that exist fewer pleasant
cities
to live in all around the world. In
this
essay I will argue the causes and
also
I would give solutions to
this
enormous problem.
First
of all, it is true to say that there are different causes that can affect the perspective of a person living in that
city
.
For example
, in my
opinion
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the main cause of the population does not want to live in these
cities
is because of the criminality rate. There are many
cities
like mine La Paz -Bolivia, which is considered one of the most dangerous places in Latin America because of all robberies that occur at night. Apart from that, another cause could be bad disposal of
garbage
, which in consequence is starting to smell. Clearly, these
actions
can affect the thinking of the citizens. Fortunately, these
actions
like criminality rate and the bad disposal of
garbage
can be solutional in order to create a better
city
to live
.
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From my perspective, the government can implement more light poles all over around in the
city
, so
this
can increment the feeling of safety when one is walking at night.
On the other hand
, bad disposal of
garbage
can
also
be easily solucionated. The community should have a habit of recycling,
in other words
, separate different types of
garbage
into different containers. To sum up, little
actions
and small solutions can increase the possibility of people wanting to live in these
cities
. In conclusion, I showed that every
city
has its disadvantages but with attitude and small
actions
it is possible to become an unpleasant
city
into a pleasant
city
to live in.
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