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Many people believe that education and high qualifications will bring success. Others think that it’s not required to achieve success in life. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Education
 plays a vital role in everybody's life. Some communities think that
people
 will get success in their lives through
education
 and higher degrees while some other communities argue with
this
 matter and say that
education
 is not necessary to be successful in their life. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both scenarios and
then
 I will give my opinion on
this
 matter with relevant examples. On the one side, some communities believe that
people
 will have
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 with significant
education
. At present days, there is huge competition in
education
.
People
 are preferring to do higher studies to get settled well. Workforces are selecting
people
 based on the
people
's degrees and experience in work.
For example
, In software companies,
people
 are getting filtered based on their
education
 and based on their experience, and wages are given to them. On the other side,
People
 can build their careers without
education
. Nowadays,
People
 are doing their own business where
education
 is not required.
For instance
, if a person, has an interest in doing business like a supermarket,
then
 he/she does not need any degree. These
people
 are mostly entrepreneurs and will have a discretion character. They are bombastic and attract
people
 with their words. To sum up, In my ,view both statements have their own reasons. In the former statement, It is important to have the
education
 to depend on other workforces while in the latter statement it is not mandatory to have a degree to develop their career. But in
this
 modern era, there is a huge demand for
education
 to build a standard life.
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