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Many people believe that scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, some individuals
opinize
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opine
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 that the authorities can carry out and control scientific
experiments
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 better than private corporations. From my personal perspective, I can not agree with
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 notion. There are various drawbacks explaining why the government should not participate in scientific research. To commence with, that the authorities allocate funds to
experiments
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 about science means they provide specialized facilities and
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 for scientists.
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, the financial
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 would lead to
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about
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 the majority of decisions. As a case in point, scientists and other
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 ideas could not be appreciated while they have to follow the strict regulation of politicians who invest in these researches.
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, the results of projects would not be effective because not any politicians could be proficient in the science domain. That private companies carry out and control scientific
experiments
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 could catalyze numerous advantages.
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 and foremost, private corporations would be
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 by huge capital from other businesses and not depend
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the
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solely
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financial
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 sponsorship from the government, which could contribute to the freedom of language and diversity of ideas because scientists and entrepreneurs have opportunities to enhance research by their own opinion.
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 to
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, leading experts who completely devote their perseverance and diligence to scientific projects could be hired thanks to huge budgets from private companies;
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; private
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experiments
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 would obtain more effective results than the authority's ones. In conclusion, while a large number of people believe projects about science should be carried out and controlled by governments I tend toward the point that private corporations could do better.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • government oversight
  • ethical guidelines
  • public interest
  • public funding
  • transparency
  • widespread access
  • long-term societal benefits
  • profit motive
  • biased findings
  • restricted research
  • collaboration
  • bureaucratic delays
  • political influence
  • innovation
  • regulations
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