Some people feel that playing computer games has a negative impact on children's health and social skills. Others say that it can have a positive impact on their lives. Discuss both these views

Technology is a great method to learn something new.Few masses think that
computer
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habbits
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habits
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that
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games
are very important for the
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development of
students
.I will discuss both views in the below paragraphs.
Firstly
computer
is a significant resource of knowledge in
this
modern era.
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it is
also
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addiction.
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damage
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damages
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and
reduce
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the power of
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.
Due to
addiction
of
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games
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games,
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students
spend
their
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most of
the
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time in play
games
.
Childrens
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not
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do not
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properly focus on study.There are many bad
impact
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impacts
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on
students
like
dipression
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depression
,mood
swing
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,
less
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and less
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intrest
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interest
interested
in physical activities.
Games
increase
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violence
in
the
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society.Pubg game is a big example today many cases are shown in the world today
this
game leads to
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violence
and has a
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bad
impact on
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mind of
students
.
Furthermore
,
computer
games
also
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helpfull
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helpful
for
brain
activity.Puzzle
games
are very crucial for
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students'
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students
life to solve difficult questions.With the help of
computer
games
students
take
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make
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dicisons
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decisions
.
Brain
start
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working fast.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • physical health
  • obesity
  • eye strain
  • repetitive strain injuries
  • social skills
  • virtual worlds
  • face-to-face interactions
  • cognitive skills
  • problem-solving
  • strategic thinking
  • hand-eye coordination
  • educational tools
  • engaging
  • multiplayer
  • online gaming communities
  • relieve stress
  • entertainment
  • moderation
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