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As a part of their education, many students work at a company for a short period of time without a salary. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to this?

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Education
 plays a vital role in everybody's life. Some communities say that people are working in some workforces without wages to get
experience
. They are thinking that
experience
 is
also
 important along with
education
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both
advantages
 and
disadvantages
. Let's see whether the
advantages
 will overweigh the
disadvantages
. On the one side,
Students
 will get
work
experience
 through Internships. Internships will provide training related to
education
 which gives empirical knowledge on the student's subjects.
Students
 are trying to get
work
experience
 before the completion of their graduation because there are plenty of opportunities for
students
 with empirical knowledge.
For instance
, In BTech colleges,
students
 are getting placed based on their internships. And another admirable example is, based on
experience
 workforce is increasing the wages of employees. In
this
 way, In the IT sector, people are getting opportunities based on their
work
experience
. On the other side, along with ,
advantages
 there are some
disadvantages
 to working in an organization during their
education
.
Firstly
, It is better to get
work
experience
 but without ,wages there will be some impact due to financial problems.
Secondly
,
students
 will think about their
work
 and neglect their studies which will lead to less scores in their
education
. Without a proper percentage in ,graduation there will be no use in having
experience
 in the
work
. To sum up, In my view, the
advantages
 will overweight the
disadvantages
. In
this
 competitive world, it is better to have
experience
 and enjoy the fruitfulness of the opportunities provided by the workforce. And
students
 should take care of their
education
 along with their
work
.
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