In future, all cars and buses will be driverless. Only passengers will be the humans traveling in this vehicles. Do you think the advantages of driverless cars outweigh the disadvantages?

Everything has two sides and autonomous driving is no exception. Due to
advancement
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technology, people will be able to drive automatically in the future and all kinds of transportation could be more convenient than in the past
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there could be some issues
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self-driving. We need to acknowledge that autonomous driving can lead you to have a problem due to cyber -
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from criminals and other countries because
this
driving system is mainly organized by
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and cyber-terrorists could force cars to drive in
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wrong way even if they protect it from the cyber-attack with high quality of net-security. In fact,
although
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US
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government
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a great quality of security, they have been intruded
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once or twice.
Furthermore
, self-driving may make people lose their job like a teacher in driving
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because people will not have to acquire
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driving
skill
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.
However
, autonomous driving could make your life more comfortable and there are more merits than demerits.
Firstly
, you can solve a problem related to manual driving because
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system can help you to drive well if you do not feel good. According to research in Japan, most of the reasons for occurring
car
accidents in 2021 are because of drowsy driving and poor physical condition.
In addition
, it could be more useful for the elderly to travel by
car
. As you are getting older, you could lose your awareness and so you could have a
car
accident easily. In 2017, a certain elderly killed one woman and her child
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accidentally
by
car
and many TV news broadcasted it as a critical social issue. In conclusion,
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driving technology could help citizens to have more positive points than negative ones.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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