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Many people complain about stress at work. How can employers reduce stress at work and what can employees do on their own to solve this problem?

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In the cutting - age , everyone has a busy timetable so they cannot take out the time for their own lives and
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 they do a job under pressure. Sometimes people argue that they cannot do
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 with stress and
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 of all , people should do less than one profession because if they
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 more than that , they will invite frustration , worry and other mental diseases ,
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 , a number of famous motivation speakers say that we should focus only on our aims ,
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 , they will get flooded bucks rather than a job.
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 , numerous people are running for the capital which is the reason they cannot live their life in the proper way ,
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 as , many businessmen do not leave their chairs, due to the temptation,
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 spending their later life stressful.
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 ,
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 should provide discounts on the workload , which can help them to reduce stress during commercial
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 ,
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 , a number of prestigious
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 give time off to employees from the
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 ,
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 , it will increase the
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 speed and they will get better performance rather than in the past.
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 , every month should organize programs for
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 , where they must respect the action person that impacts others and try to do more
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 ,
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 , many
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 organize an annual function , where they provide awards to workers , who give their hard for the industry. In conclusion , many industries should take care of them , Which can help them to decrease the rate of employee migration ,
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 , they will increase rapidly income of factory.
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