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Many people complain about stress at work. How can employers reduce stress at work and what can employees do on their own to solve this problem?

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In the cutting - age , everyone has a busy timetable so they cannot take out the time for their own lives and
also
 they do a job under pressure. Sometimes people argue that they cannot do
work
 with stress and
this
 essay explains problems and gives solutions to
this
 statement.
First
 of all , people should do less than one profession because if they
work
 more than that , they will invite frustration , worry and other mental diseases ,
for instance
 , a number of famous motivation speakers say that we should focus only on our aims ,
consequently
 , they will get flooded bucks rather than a job.
Furthermore
 , numerous people are running for the capital which is the reason they cannot live their life in the proper way ,
such
 as , many businessmen do not leave their chairs, due to the temptation,
therefore
 spending their later life stressful.
On the other hand
 ,
companies
 should provide discounts on the workload , which can help them to reduce stress during commercial
work
 ,
for example
 , a number of prestigious
companies
 give time off to employees from the
work
 ,
consequently
 , it will increase the
work
 speed and they will get better performance rather than in the past.
Moreover
 , every month should organize programs for
companies
 , where they must respect the action person that impacts others and try to do more
work
 ,
for example
 , many
companies
 organize an annual function , where they provide awards to workers , who give their hard for the industry. In conclusion , many industries should take care of them , Which can help them to decrease the rate of employee migration ,
in addition
 , they will increase rapidly income of factory.
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