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Nowadays many students choose to take a year off before entering university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of taking a year off, and give your own opinion about whether it is a good idea.

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It has been noticed nowadays, that high school
students
 tend to take a gap
year
 before they join universities. They aim to travel and gain experience before starting another phase of their academic learning process. Personally, I find myself
inclind
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inclined
 to admit that it is an effective way to help
students
 to decide exactly the field or the programme they want to join in the
next
 academic
year
. The
first
 advantage of the gap
year
 is that it offers the
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students
 who worked hard some rest to get rid of stress and have enough
time
 to
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explore
 the life before
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starting
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starting
 their studies again.
However
, a lot of recent studies have shown that
students
, who took a
one
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year
 break to travel and work before deciding
the
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 college or university they want to join, had graduated fully satisfied
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 their choice and they had shown
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 to start searching for jobs. Another merit to highlight
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 is the work experience or skills they learnt during
this
year
, which can be highlighted in their resume. Certainly,
this
 would facilitate for them finding a
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part
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time
 job to support themselves
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financially
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 during their study. a good example to
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this
 point
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 around the world we can hear about companies
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 to organize and guide young people during
this
year
, a lot of them are keen to find
for
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them opportunities according to their desire to try practically the duties
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. At the same
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 many people stress
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that the importance of
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break
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break
 is overrated and some
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 lose their
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 to learn. they
also
 believe that the
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experience
expeirence
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experience
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can be
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gained
gain
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gained
 during their study as a
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time
 job or even after they graduate. They claim that being familiar with the required knowledge is more important before starting any
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job
 as
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proficiently
 in any field would certainly
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perform
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 much better than those who are not. To conclude, the aforementioned points clearly showed the potential advantages and disadvantages of
this
 phenomenon , but I find myself
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 to state that the demerits are eclipsed by the merits of
such
 experience as it helps the student to be
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responsible
 individuals and one
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 sure about the programme they want to join in universities.
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