Nowadays many students choose to take a year off before entering university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of taking a year off, and give your own opinion about whether it is a good idea.

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It has been noticed nowadays, that high school
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tend to take a gap
year
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before they join universities. They aim to travel and gain experience before starting another phase of their academic learning process. Personally, I find myself
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to admit that it is an effective way to help
students
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to decide exactly the field or the programme they want to join in the
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academic
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. The
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advantage of the gap
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is that it offers the
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students
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who worked hard some rest to get rid of stress and have enough
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to
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explore
the life before
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starting
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starting
their studies again.
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, a lot of recent studies have shown that
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, who took a
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break to travel and work before deciding
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college or university they want to join, had graduated fully satisfied
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their choice and they had shown
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to start searching for jobs. Another merit to highlight
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is the work experience or skills they learnt during
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year
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, which can be highlighted in their resume. Certainly,
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job to support themselves
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financially
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during their study. a good example to
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illustrate
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illustrate
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point
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around the world we can hear about companies
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to organize and guide young people during
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, a lot of them are keen to find
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them opportunities according to their desire to try practically the duties
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. At the same
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time
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many people stress
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that the importance of
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break
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break
is overrated and some
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lose their
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to learn. they
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believe that the
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experience
expeirence
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experience
they seek
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can be
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gained
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gained
during their study as a
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part
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job or even after they graduate. They claim that being familiar with the required knowledge is more important before starting any
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job
as
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proficiently
in any field would certainly
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perform
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much better than those who are not. To conclude, the aforementioned points clearly showed the potential advantages and disadvantages of
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phenomenon , but I find myself
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to state that the demerits are eclipsed by the merits of
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experience as it helps the student to be
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responsible
individuals and one
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hundred
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sure about the programme they want to join in universities.
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