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Unemployment is one of the biggest problems of contemporary society.What do you think are the main causes of unemployment?What solutions can you suggest?

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In the beginning, A big problem for each country is that some of the younger generations have problems finding new jobs. In my opinion, the main factor is the authorities.The causes and the solutions will be explained in the following lines.
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, governments have a great role to increase the number of not working people.
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, If there are new projects which require new employees, there will not be many people without work. A prime example is Egypt where many graduates just sit at home.
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, Investors can help to find new jobs for citizens. I am convinced that new projects will open the doors of opportunities for young people who are looking for work. It can be said that unemployment causes social disability, and authorities have to support youth.
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