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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a spurce of problems if it is not well-managed. what are the advantages and disadvantaged of tourism in the modern world?

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Usually, it is argued that tourism plays an important role in the income sources of many areas
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, it may lead to the cause of many problems if management is bad. In
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 essay, I will discuss the pros and cons of tourism with suitable examples. First of all, beautiful and famous parts of the country take the attention of the tourists. They come from all over the world just to see the beauty of nature.
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, in Pakistan, there are many famous places like Muree, Swat, Naran Kaghan, Azad Kashmir and Kumrat. They are known for their natural charm. They stay in hotels, buy things like clothes, dry fruits etc which ultimately contribute to the mean of revenue. Azad Kashmir is very popular for its greenery and dried fruits too. Tourists from all over the earth come here and enjoy the place and buy these goods too.
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 why the earth mainly relies on travel as the main source of its income.
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, there are some other factors that are responsible for many problems if they are not organised well. Lack of facilities
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 non-availability of hotels may lead to many issues.
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world tour organization
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, providing better quality food, hotels and
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 is the right of the tourists. If these needs are not fulfilled
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 it will lead to a decrease in travel So, management of
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 places should be very well because it is directly linked to their wage. In
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conclusion, there are many places in the sphere that are very well known for their beauty, nature, food and many things. It is believed that managing things
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 the situation is too important because if they are not managed well
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it will be the responsibility for many issues.
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coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion need to be more explicit and comprehensive to fully address the topic.
task achievement
The examples and explanations are relevant, but a more extensive analysis and discussion of the advantages and disadvantages of tourism is needed.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
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