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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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There are various opinions on sectors where government should invest public funds. People argue that the art
sector
 should receive more funds rather than public service. I agree that the
music
 and theatre
sector
 is deserving of more investment. Expatiating the cultural teaching power of theatre as well as the tourism
values
 of
music
 will prove that. To start with, theatre is a means of reiterating cultural
values
 to members of society.
This
 could be used as a subtle way to introduce the younger generation to some important cultural practices
such
 as honesty, diligence, and perseverance amongst others. It can
also
 serve as a channel for re-enforcement learning of good
values
 and morals for the adult category of society.
For instance
 in Nigeria, the authority is prioritizing jingles and films centred on some near-extinct
values
such
 as honesty.
Furthermore
,
Music
 encourages tourism which
besides
 making more money for the state, it is a way of promoting the language and culture of a particular country.
Music
 is in no doubt enjoyed by the majority of the public either as a way of relaxation or motivation. Indigenous songs showcase the culture and language of a group of people to the entire world. When concerts are staged, fans from various parts of the globe gather to dance and know each other.
This
 not only brings tourists to the host country
,
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 but
also
 brings a financial boom too. Phyno, a Nigerian musician who raps in an indigenous language recently stages a musical concert that brought individuals who might not know where Africa is on the map to Nigeria. Conclusively, the art
sector
 offers more benefits than the public
sector
. I agree that more funds should be allotted for more development as the authority will not only make more money through tourism, it will
also
 teach culture and morals to the members of the society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural enrichment
  • expression of creativity
  • promote diversity
  • enhance social cohesion
  • boost tourism
  • job creation
  • stimulate economic growth
  • improve quality of life
  • essential services
  • maintenance and development
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