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MOST PEOPLE PREFER TO RENT THEIR HOMES RATHER THAN BUYING THEM.

#people #rent #homes
Many people around the world need to own property than rent
the
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house
 or apartment. so I have some reason
in
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this
 below in my writing.
Firstly
, so many people around the world who like to live with our property and
permenently
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permanently
 to living and get happiness with family,
moreover
, we can decorate our
house
 with
forneture
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furniture
 and garden and make our
house
 more beautiful and fresh.
secondly
, we don't need to
spent
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 money monthly
to
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on
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the renter
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renter
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rent
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.
On the other hand
, the rental
house
 we need to
spent
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in
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apply
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monthly, and we get
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a lot
alot
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a lot
 of
benefit
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benefits
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 from renting
house
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a house
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 with spent
to
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apply
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on tax, don't spend on biggest money to buy
expensive
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an expensive
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house
.
To
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 conclusion, renting a
house
 is low
spenting
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spending
 money and buy a
house
 can be live
permenently
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permanently
. I
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believed
believe
belived
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believe
 that I wish to buy a
house
 for my property.
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