In many countries it is now illegal to advertise alcohol. Do you agree or disagree?

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sales and
consumption
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of alcoholic drinks are not prohibited in many countries, advertising
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has been illegalized.
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is
due to
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many consequences which are followed by publicizing beverages containing
alcohol
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. I,
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, firmly agree that
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advertisement
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of
alcohol
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must be banned and I will elaborate
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reasons in
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essay. Companies pay millions of dollars for
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advertisement
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advertisements
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of their products with the goal of increasing sales. If the
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alcohol producing
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companies are allowed to freely advertise their products, their sales of goods will grow by either more people purchasing or people purchasing more. Since
alcohol
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is a highly addictive substance and is one of the main root causes of many
chronical
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chronic
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the growth
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of its ingestion rate among individuals will lead to many health
problems
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such
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as cancers, diabetes, cardiac attack and so on.
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, Russia has one of the most
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alcohol related
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cancer rates in comparison to other countries
due to
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its
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alcohol consuming
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society.
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, I am in agreement with the illegalization of
alcohol
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advertising in order to prevent the growth of
alcohol
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consumption
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per capita and
number
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a number
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of
alcohol
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consumers.
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,
advertisement
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has proven to be more influential on the juvenile. By permitting
alcohol
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advertisements, underage ones are more likely to be attracted
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consumption
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the consumption
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of alcoholic drinks
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their lack of sufficient awareness about the effects of
alcohol
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on the body and the brain and
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the
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consequences of breaking the law. Underage drinking, apart
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from being
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against the law, can lead to both short-term and long-term
problems
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such
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as
alcohol
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addiction
problems
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at
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adulthood, unstable personality, mental and physical disorders and so on.
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, since no type of
advertisement
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can exclude any age group, if
alcohol
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advertisement
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is not disallowed by law, can significantly tempt juveniles and promote underage drinking, which, not only can develop law-breaking
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,
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but
also
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will result in serious physical and mental damage in adolescents.
To conclude
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, since
alcohol
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is very addictive and is one of the main reasons of many health
problems
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, it should be banned from being advertised in
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of
prevention
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of growth of
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alcohol
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the alcohol
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consumption
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rate and underage drinking promotion in
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society.
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