In many countries it is now illegal to advertise alcohol. Do you agree or disagree?
Although
sales and consumption
of alcoholic drinks are not prohibited in many countries, advertising it
has been illegalized. Correct pronoun usage
apply
This
is due to
many consequences which are followed by publicizing beverages containing alcohol
. I, however
, firmly agree that advertisement
of Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
alcohol
must be banned and I will elaborate my
reasons in Change preposition
on my
this
essay. Companies pay millions of dollars for advertisement
of their products with the goal of increasing sales. If the Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
alcohol producing
companies are allowed to freely advertise their products, their sales of goods will grow by either more people purchasing or people purchasing more. Since Add a hyphen
alcohol-producing
alcohol
is a highly addictive substance and is one of the main root causes of many chronical
diseases, Correct your spelling
chronic
growth
of its ingestion rate among individuals will lead to many health Correct article usage
the growth
problems
such
as cancers, diabetes, cardiac attack and so on. For example
, Russia has one of the most alcohol related
cancer rates in comparison to other countries Add a hyphen
alcohol-related
due to
its alcohol consuming
society. Add a hyphen
alcohol-consuming
Therefore
, I am in agreement with the illegalization of alcohol
advertising in order to prevent the growth of alcohol
consumption
per capita and number
of Change the article
a number
the number
alcohol
consumers. Moreover
, advertisement
has proven to be more influential on the juvenile. By permitting alcohol
advertisements, underage ones are more likely to be attracted in
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to
consumption
of alcoholic drinks Correct article usage
the consumption
due to
their lack of sufficient awareness about the effects of alcohol
on the body and the brain andCorrect article usage
the
being
against the law, can lead to both short-term and long-term Change preposition
from being
problems
such
as alcohol
addiction problems
at
adulthood, unstable personality, mental and physical disorders and so on. Change preposition
in
Therefore
, since no type of advertisement
can exclude any age group, if alcohol
advertisement
is not disallowed by law, can significantly tempt juveniles and promote underage drinking, which, not only can develop law-breaking attitude
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attitudes
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
will result in serious physical and mental damage in adolescents. To conclude
, since alcohol
is very addictive and is one of the main reasons of many health problems
, it should be banned from being advertised in hope
of Correct article usage
the hope
prevention
of growth of Replace the word
preventing
alcohol
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the alcohol
consumption
rate and underage drinking promotion in the
society.Correct article usage
apply
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