In many countries it is now illegal to advertise alcohol. Do you agree or disagree?

Although
sales and
consumption
of alcoholic drinks are not prohibited in many countries, advertising
it
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has been illegalized.
This
is
due to
many consequences which are followed by publicizing beverages containing
alcohol
. I,
however
, firmly agree that
advertisement
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of
alcohol
must be banned and I will elaborate
my
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reasons in
this
essay. Companies pay millions of dollars for
advertisement
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advertisements
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of their products with the goal of increasing sales. If the
alcohol producing
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companies are allowed to freely advertise their products, their sales of goods will grow by either more people purchasing or people purchasing more. Since
alcohol
is a highly addictive substance and is one of the main root causes of many
chronical
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chronic
diseases,
growth
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of its ingestion rate among individuals will lead to many health
problems
such
as cancers, diabetes, cardiac attack and so on.
For example
, Russia has one of the most
alcohol related
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cancer rates in comparison to other countries
due to
its
alcohol consuming
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society.
Therefore
, I am in agreement with the illegalization of
alcohol
advertising in order to prevent the growth of
alcohol
consumption
per capita and
number
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of
alcohol
consumers.
Moreover
,
advertisement
has proven to be more influential on the juvenile. By permitting
alcohol
advertisements, underage ones are more likely to be attracted
in
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consumption
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the consumption
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of alcoholic drinks
due to
their lack of sufficient awareness about the effects of
alcohol
on the body and the brain and
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consequences of breaking the law. Underage drinking, apart
being
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against the law, can lead to both short-term and long-term
problems
such
as
alcohol
addiction
problems
at
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adulthood, unstable personality, mental and physical disorders and so on.
Therefore
, since no type of
advertisement
can exclude any age group, if
alcohol
advertisement
is not disallowed by law, can significantly tempt juveniles and promote underage drinking, which, not only can develop law-breaking
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,
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but
also
will result in serious physical and mental damage in adolescents.
To conclude
, since
alcohol
is very addictive and is one of the main reasons of many health
problems
, it should be banned from being advertised in
hope
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of
prevention
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of growth of
alcohol
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the alcohol
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consumption
rate and underage drinking promotion in
the
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society.
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