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The only way to ensure road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offences. To what extent do you agree?

#road #safety #punishments #offences
To
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safe
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 the
traffic
raods
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roads
need
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 punish drivers with
penalty
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a penalty
the penalty
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. I totally disagree with
this
 statement we can solve
this
 problem with another
way
 adding
traffic
rolls
 to
school
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a school
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 subject. A
lot
 of
people
 think that the most important
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thing
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think
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 is safe
traffic
rolls
 and to
safe
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save
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people
 from
acsident
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accident
accidents
. I totally agree with
statement
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the statement
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 but they give a
lot
 of punishments
people
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 who do not do
rolls
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, for example,
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for example
 one
percent
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per cent
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 drive a car
on
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at
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 the red light and he
get
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 punishment
to
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for
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this
 work.
However
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 he
is reach
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is reaching
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 and he can do
this
 job more times. with
this
work
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,work
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 he will
acsident
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accident
 after a
lot
 of times. The punishment is not
right
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the right
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way
 like
a
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this
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these
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 events. It can help
people
 live but no more. I think we
need
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 add
subject
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a subject
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than
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that
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 we can improve our
knowlange
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knowledge
from
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traffic
rolls
 and in every
school
 need built places to learn how right ride a car after finishing
school
 the
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government
goverenment
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government
 should give car documents but we
also
 need punishments but it should be who don't do
rolls
. They
need
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 go to
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a place
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place
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places
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 like
big
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a big
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school
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schools
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 and they
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should
shoud
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should
practice
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practise
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 there until they catch their mistake and drive correctly. In conclusion, There
are
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 a
lot
 of other
way
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ways
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improve
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to improve
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 driving skills not only with punishments we cannot change we cannot improve peoples' driving skills we need more
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useful
usefull
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useful
way
 like adding "
Traffic
rolls
" subject or
builting
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building
 big places to practice like punishment schools.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deter
  • reckless behavior
  • psychological deterrence
  • adhere
  • penalties
  • awareness campaigns
  • knowledge and skills
  • technological solutions
  • advanced safety features
  • automatic braking systems
  • lane departure warnings
  • traffic surveillance
  • enforce laws
  • socio-economic impact
  • disproportionately
  • broader social issues
  • community engagement
  • road safety culture
  • collective responsibility
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