The only way to ensure road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offences. To what extent do you agree?

To
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safe
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the
traffic
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roads
need
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punish drivers with
penalty
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. I totally disagree with
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statement we can solve
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problem with another
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adding
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rolls
to
school
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subject. A
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of
people
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think
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is safe
traffic
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people
from
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. I totally agree with
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but they give a
lot
of punishments
people
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who do not do
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for example
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drive a car
on
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the red light and he
get
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punishment
to
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this
work.
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he
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and he can do
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he will
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accident
after a
lot
of times. The punishment is not
right
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way
like
a
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this
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events. It can help
people
live but no more. I think we
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add
subject
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than
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we can improve our
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knowledge
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traffic
rolls
and in every
school
need built places to learn how right ride a car after finishing
school
the
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government
goverenment
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government
should give car documents but we
also
need punishments but it should be who don't do
rolls
. They
need
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go to
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place
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like
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school
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and they
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should
practice
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there until they catch their mistake and drive correctly. In conclusion, There
are
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a
lot
of other
way
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improve
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driving skills not only with punishments we cannot change we cannot improve peoples' driving skills we need more
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useful
usefull
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useful
way
like adding "
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rolls
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builting
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building
big places to practice like punishment schools.
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