Some people think that young people should follow traditions of the society, while other people think that young people should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A bunch of pupils believe that youngsters ought to go after the culture of the community,

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some people claim that juveniles must be at liberty to act as single. Before giving my opinion I would like to look after both points. Discussing the foremost view, the

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with the aura and identity of the society. It will uphold, the social connection.

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, in order to preserve

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it is mandatory to follow them. If children do not adopt their cultural knowledge after a matter of

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it will fade and get extinct in

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modern era.

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, an adaptation of traditional values teaches us to respect our elders which ultimately leads to a better bond between families and

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the growth of civilization. Analyzing the other view, in

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every person has

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and the right to do whatever they like.

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is because if they have their own choices they can be more creative.

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, some religious myths are better if they change or can be avoided. To illustrate

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were forced to marry at

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early age and were stopped from

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. After a certain, age they have to do only household chores. But now as the

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is changing people are neglecting

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and women are living their life on their own terms.

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is a major

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of the development of the country. To conclude, in my

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to follow

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customs

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inheritance of traditions from older to younger is very important. But

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living life on own terms is

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essential. So I believe

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ought to be followed but they should not be forced on the youngster and not be an obstacle to the growth of younger ones.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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312 words

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Some people think that young people should follow traditions of the society, while other people think that young people should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

When choosing a job, while some people think that the salary is the most important thing to be taken into consideration, others have a diverse view. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high amount of sugar which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree.