Although families have influence on children’s development, factors outside the home play a bigger part in their lives nowadays. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Our Forefather says “Evil communication corrupts bad manners” which means what is in close contact with ink will be black, what is near light will be illuminating, and it is precisely correct with
children
’s influence that the factors outside the home play a bigger part in their lives. I agree with the opinion In fact,
children
growing up in a small family will be influenced by their parents individually because of getting a family education every day.
However
, once they grew up, they would need more knowledge as well as automatically receive information from outside without recognition of quality.
Besides
, up to their innateness, some
children
like subjects from a society that their parents do not have
such
as literature, music or painting while others like information technology or physic
Secondly
,
children
easily learn negative manners once they unluckily contact uneducated persons.
In addition
, social factors
also
influence young
children
much more than educational elements
such
as online games, gambling, etc. Sometimes, we can see many students in game centres or shop centres during school time while others easily get social seduction that their parents never expected. Obviously, social factors really influence
children
’s development or at least impact their life somewhat
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proliferation
  • Media
  • Technology
  • Peer influence
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Educational institutions
  • Character building
  • Social norms
  • Global community
  • Cultural exchange
  • Marketing
  • Advertising
  • Preferences
  • Values
  • Government policies
  • Standardized education
  • Child welfare programs
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