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Most artists earn low salaries and should therefore receive funding from the government in order for them to continue with their work. What are the advantages and disadvantages

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Nowadays,
artists
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 earn low salaries for their work
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 they should receive funding from the government in order to continue with their work. Making real
art
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 is a long and unique process and makes
artwork
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 so expensive. Creating a good piece of
artwork
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 like a statue or a unique painting can take weeks or even months. That makes it mostly unaffordable for the regular folk. The advantage of giving funds to
artists
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 is that the
artwork
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 is getting cheaper and more affordable.
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, it
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 makes
art
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 more attractive for young
people
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 to study
art
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 and become an artist. Despite the advantages, giving funds to
artists
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also
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 has some disadvantages. The money for the funds is paid by taxpayers and not everybody likes
art
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 like someone else. Spending tax money for
artwork
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 that
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 could be used to build roads or to help homeless
people
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 is a kind of ethical decision. In conclusion, I would say funding artist is a good idea, but we should not forget the
people
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 on the streets who need help even more than
artists
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. To think in an ethically way what does it help us when we live in a nice city while many other
people
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 have to sleep right
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 to the
artwork
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 that could have been a house for homeless
people
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