Full-time university students spend a lot of time studying. Some say they should do other activities too. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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University education is a way of imparting knowledge,
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and learning. It is believed
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that
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who are enrolled full
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at the university should participate in extra-curricular
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besides
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studying, while
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academic study is important, other
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are as important. I strongly agree with
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statement.
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, participating in extra-curricular
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benefits
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automatically. One of the reasons is that
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learn many lessons from these
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like singing or dancing may relax people, which will refresh
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and can have a fresh start. While some might
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say that
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have a busy schedule and
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cannot have spare
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. I would counter
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by saying that it is often better for
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to have some relaxation
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in their life
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they will be bored soon and cannot concentrate anymore.
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, through these ,
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students
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learn life
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as
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management that benefit them a lot.
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, the
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must plan their
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wisely and efficiently to complete the assigned tasks.
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, education is not solely learned by reading the textbook, for
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can learn an incredible amount from their peers through extracurricular
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learn how to compromise and work in a group. Extracurricular
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learners to meet and interact with others that may not be within their close group of friends.
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,
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help to enhance their social
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and teach lessons. not learned in a classroom. ,
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it is well known that nowadays. even recruiters look for social
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to academic qualifications while looking for employees. To sum up, I would like to reiterate my opinion that
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at university should not just be engrossed in their book
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but
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do other
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because it helps to develop social
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and build character lessons.
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