Some people think that the media such as newspaper should be allowed to publish information of people’s private life. Others however, think that there should be controls to stop this media frompppp this kind of information. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

ıt could make ıt easier for frauds, no good for famous
people
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their lovers could
wonder
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wander
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it could cause great
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disasters
diseasters
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diseases
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diana
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Nowadays, there is a constant debate on whether the media should be
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allowed
alloved
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allowed
to share
people
's private life. There could be many reasons to let
media
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to
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do
this
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such
as protecting
fame
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the fame
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of famous
people
. But, ı believe without proper regulation ıt could cause
great
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diseaster
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disaster
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like
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we saw in lady
Diana
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accident.
Firstly
, and foremost, many
people
believe that famous
people
and
politicians
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politicians'
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lives
is
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public property. And there should be no privacy
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