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Concentrated solar power is becoming more and more popular as a source of energy in many countries around the world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this energy source?

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Over the
last
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 few decades, there has been a sharp increase in the number of countries which are powered by renewable energy sources
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 as concentrated solar power. The advantages and disadvantages of concentrated solar power have been discussed in
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 essay. Using concentrated solar
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 has various benefits. These benefits can be categorized into environmental advantages and accessibility. The
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 advantage that has brought attention to renewable energy sources is clean
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. Concentrated solar
panels
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 do not require any fossil fuel to operate.
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,
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 system does not emit greenhouse gases
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 as CO2 and CH4. Meanwhile, solar
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 can be installed everywhere.
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 of
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, even distant villages can have access to
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 without any problem.
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, solar
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 have some disadvantages. The most important trouble caused by solar
panels
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 is related to fixing them. Through the years,
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 of changes in weather,
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 get hazy. Dust
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 and other pollutants cover the
panels
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 and reduce their efficiency . Meanwhile, the
panels
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 have a lifespan of around 5 years which makes it difficult and expensive to change them every time. Moving
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 and replacing them with new ones interrupts
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electricity
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 generation. Not only is the cost of
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 significant, but
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 the
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 charge is considerable. All in all, concentrated solar
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its
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 own advantages and disadvantages. In order to decide whether
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 energy source can be chosen as the main source,
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 factors above have to be considered.

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