some people think that the teenagers should concentrate on all subjects at school. Others beleive that teenagers should focus on the subject they are best or they are most interested are most interested in. To what extent do you agree?

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A few people say that the young
students
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are should give their importance to all the subjects in the
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, other
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of people debate that young
students
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should only give their importance to the
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which they are interested. I strongly
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disagree
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statement which is stated by the
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group of people. There are two main
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why all the
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study
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all the
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subject
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in
school
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,
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learn
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fundamental information about everything in every
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. If they omit the particular
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that they are not interested
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they would not able to have the
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knowledge about it.
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young student likes to study science in the future but,
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is not
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interested
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interested
in math and physics
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subject
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then
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they cannot excel in science. In order to go for
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higher
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students
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should have the
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eligible
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marks in all subjects because every Universities and
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requires
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in every
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.
on
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the
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other words,
students
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also
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have the
options
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to choose their favourite
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in
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college.
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, my friend scored
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good marks in all the
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but he got 55% in his math. Because of
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he missed out
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chance to study
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one of the world's best oxford
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. It is because he did not give much importance to that
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, if he did that
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he would have
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a seat in that college. To summarize
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topic, In my view,
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should focus
all
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the
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subject
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at
school
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without fail to get
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higher studies in the future .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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