Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In today’s modern society, many industrial activities bring a wide
range
of environmental
problems
to our
Earth
. On many forums, some think that the extinction of
species
of plants and animals is the primary issue of our time.
However
, many
people
think that
besides
the loss of many
species
, there
also
exist
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a
range
of other paramount environmental
problems
. Personally, I think one of the most vital issues, which we have to deal with, is the extinction of these animals and plants.
First
of all, our
Earth
have
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to face up with many
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environmental
problems
not only the loss of particular
species
but
also
other critical
problems
. The rising
of
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sea level, global warming,
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and the
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melting of
permafrosts
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,…,
for example
, are the consequences of
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climate change, one of the most important issues of our time. As we have known before, the more carbon dioxide
emit
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into our atmosphere, the more disasters we have to deal with in the future.
Besides
that, many activities from the factory
also
contribute
on
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a wide
range
of CO2 and make our atmosphere become worse than ever.
In addition
, today, many natural disasters happen more often in our
life
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and the frequency
are
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unpredictable,
this
problem caused a lot of damage to
people
's property and many
people
can die because of these disasters.
On the other hand
, the extinction of many
species
is
also
the main environmental
problems
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problem
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that we must take care of so that there are no serious consequences later. Because these
species
are the most vital sources of our life, edible plants,
for example
, provide
for
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human
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humans
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a
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wide
range
of food.
Besides
that, it is essential for our atmosphere because it is
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important tool which is used to exchange
with
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the
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carbon dioxide. Another reason is that the more
species
exist in the world, the more vegetation
exist
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exists
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in
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our
Earth
and it contributes
on
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our biodiversity. From
viewpoint
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, I strongly believe that more and more
species
can have a
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positive
possitive
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positive
effect not only
for
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us but
also
for
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on
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our
Earth
. It can be the main factor which has
a
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enormous impact on the
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maintenance
maintance
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maintenance
and
decreasing
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of the ecological imbalance in the
species’s
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diversity. In conclusion, albeit there are many
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environmental
problems
which
people
have to deal with in the future, the loss of many
species
both the fauna and flora is the most important
issues
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which
people
have to solve immediately. Because it is the basic problem if
people
want to save and reduce the consequences of climate change.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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