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Some people think a country benefits from a large proportion of young university students, others think sending young people to universities only leads to graduate unemployment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is a common belief in today’s world that the increase in the number of youngsters entering
universities
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 only results in a high unemployment rate,
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, it would be considered
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a good impact on the development of our country. On the one hand, some people have
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 mindset because they think that the growth in the number of students going to
universities
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 leads to more aggressive competition in the job market after graduation.
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, various graduated students are not able to find a job for several months or even a year after leaving the university with a good diploma.
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, my friend’s brother who is a bachelor of economics has just moved to his hometown and has been a blue-collar worker, after two years of finding a suitable job related to economics.
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the number of university students
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going up does more good than harm to our country’s growth. If more and more youngsters have opportunities to go to professional learning environments, our country will have more residents with good educational backgrounds that contribute to its modernization and civilization processes. Specifically,
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 are places that give birth to various talented people,
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 as good doctors to save our inhabitants, good teachers to teach our children, and good leaders to lead our country. In conclusion,
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 some people say that sending youngsters to
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 only sets off the increase in the unemployment rate, I personally believe that
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 trend is a great sign of our country’s development.
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