Modern technology is changing our world. This has advantages such as bringing people closer together through communication. It also has disadvantages such as destroying the differences between cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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technology
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our world has changed significantly. There are several viewpoints for and against
this
change whether it is beneficial or not. While some
people
believe new
technology
can be advantageous in
term
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of bringing
people
closer and disadvantageous in
term
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of vanishing different
cultures
, I do not agree with them. New technologies have brought us cutting-edge means of communication.
However
, it is highly controversial whether
people
can benefit from them or not. Since using new electronic devices
such
as mobile phones and
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are much easier to be used in order to communicate with our relatives or friends, we prefer to speak with them via phone calls or video calls.
Therefore
,
instead
of visiting other
people
and spending some quality
times
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with them, we decide not to see them in person.
This
can undoubtedly lead us to be more isolated rather than
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closer together. Some
people
claim that modern
technology
is vanishing differences between
cultures
.
This
may
has
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some adverse effects on
cultures
.
However
, in my opinion, these effects are minor,
In addition
from a social standpoint, culture is not something that can easily be destroyed by
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such
as
technology
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advancement. The
people
’s beliefs play
vital
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role in
culture
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cultural
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transformation, I do not believe technological advancements are able to alter
people
’s thoughts. In conclusion, I do not agree with the statement. Nee technologies have facilitated our communications in
cost
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of bringing gaps among individuals. I
also
believe that since there are other decisive factors, recent advances in
technology
is
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not able to destroy
cultures
.
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