Nowadays, young people communicate with friends and family mostily through social networking sites, rather than other ways of communication like talking on the phone or face to face. Do you think this is a positve or negative development.

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Recently youngsters have created a new

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in the field of

communication

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by using social media

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telecommunication

telecommunications

communication

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talking face to face as in

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days.

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current development has both merits and demerits, but as far as I am concerned, the advantages out weight the disadvantage.

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the discovery

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internet

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the internet

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has changed human life

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much that without

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we have

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it very difficult to survive. communicating with friends and faraway

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has become easier than it used to be, after the invention of social networking. To illustrate,

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snapchat

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are the trending websites mostly used by teenagers to chat and call their pals.

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, these websites do not charge extra for overseas

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and

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one can send or

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receive

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videos

and photos free of cost. Anyhow,

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new

communication

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technology has improved

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relationships by getting in touch with all the old friends and far relatives.

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, in

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busy world, the adults and younger generation do not get time to meet friends in person but, they can be in contact and know about

others

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life easily with the help of

communication

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networking sites.

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telephones and mobile phones are a bit costlier in case of communicating with family in a different country which has led to the decline of

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mode of

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. To summarise, modern inventions have made life easier and

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less complex

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less complex

and

internet

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the internet

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and social network

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one of them.

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it has some

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,the

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benefits

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benefits

are way more.

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, I consider

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technology

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development

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apply

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a positive trend.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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267 words

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