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Some people think that having a set retiremnet age(e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive at an earlier age. 1.Do you agree or disagree? 2.Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement? Give reasond for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The given line graph illustrates the average daily distance of people in the UK travelling by car,
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 and train from 1970 to 1930. Overall, it is clear that the average mile for travelling by
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 demonstrated an upward
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, and it is expected to maintain the
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 in the future, whereas that of the
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 showed a downward
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 and might keep declining in the following years. Looking
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 at car and
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, these two categories indicate a contrary
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. An increase can be seen in the average figure of trains, climbing from around 5 in 1970 to 7 in 2022, and the number is anticipated to keep increasing all the way to 9 in 2030. As for buses, the figure stood at about 4 in 1970 and fell to 3 in 2022, according to the graph, the figure is likely to maintain the inclination and will drop under 3 in 2030. Moving onto the train, the average distance of the train experienced a gradual increase from 2 in 1970 to 3 in 2000 and levelled off at the number until 2010. In the following years, a rise can be seen again to about 4 in 2022, and likely, the number will keep climbing, eventually reaching 5 in 2030.
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