Most of the urgent problems can only be solved with international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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has brought human beings substantial troubles,

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as greenhouse effects, cancers and air pollution. Some say we can solve these urgent problems only through global corporations.

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, I tend to think

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is just a solution and we

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have other possibilities. There is no doubt that international cooperation can solve some urgent problems and sometimes only

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can make a difference. The

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has caused serious air pollution and greenhouse effects, which cause a great number of illnesses and climate warming. Only every country can take action, can these issues be tackled.

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, many summits on carbon peak have been held to promote the cooperation of various countries to reduce emissions.

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, just one country devoted to it cannot realize our goal.

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, it is difficult to call for all countries to cooperate to solve all these troubles

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the great profits of technology and patent protection.

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, when the Covid-19 virus spread all over

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world, it is hard to require vaccine producers to provide their products to all.

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, their top priority is to meet the

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of their local people.

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, we can find other possibilities. Nowadays, we are developing technologies to find out-space civilization. Some scientists say that they may be more developed than human beings and we may adopt their technologies to solve our urgent issues. In conclusion, global corporations can solve some of the urgent problems and only through

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, we can manage them. But, in some cases, it is difficult to call for all countries to cooperate with each other and we can find other possible solutions to nail these troubles.

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