Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both these views.

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Nowadays diet is something that completely defines

individual’s

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mood and fitness. Some

people

assume that the

government

should fully control what is consumed by the citizens. Others think that every man should care for his health by himself only.

This

essay would discuss both these opinions.

To begin

with, I will explain the

first

viewpoint. It seems very rational

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when considering the fact that through the system of taxes

government

could control every position on the market.

Such

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could be very resultant, because, surely,

people

would have less desire to buy expensive goods.

Moreover

, another way to keep citizens fit lies through different activities.

Government

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could establish more free outside

sport

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centers

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, where

people

would be able to do

certain

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set

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of exercises. On the other side, every person understands his real needs better than others. It is very hard to launch restrictions that would positively affect every man in the country. Due to

this

fact, it is logical that everyone should control himself separately from others. Taking sport into consideration, it should be stated, that it is extremely complicated to motivate inactive

people

to do

sport

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activities. To conclude, I want to outline that being healthy lies in the zone of responsibility of every citizen.

Nevertheless

, it would make

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a huge

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improvement if the

government

would publicly support

healthy

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a healthy

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way of life.

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Topic Vocabulary:

health-conscious decisions
self-discipline
informed choices
personal accountability
regulating food industries
implementing policies
healthy eating
public health campaigns
subsidies for healthy food
enabling environment
accessible
affordable

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Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both these views.

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In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Nowdays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case ? What could be the disadvantages of being self- employed?