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some people believe that construction of new public buildings such as museum town hall and sporting facility is more important than renovation of the existing ones, while others disagree. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #construction #buildings #museum #town #hall #facility #renovation #ones
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It has long been a debate
whether
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 there should be
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 on constructing newer
buildings
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 or repairing the older ones.Some people are of the belief that constructing
of
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new public
buildings
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for
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 instance,
museum
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museums
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,town halls and sporting facilities is
crucial
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 than reconstructing the existing ones while others of the idea that there should be a greater focus
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 renovation.In
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 essay,I will argue that
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renovating
of
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old
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the old
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building
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buildings
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 is a great alternative for town planning,construction of newer
buildings
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 remains an efficient and
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better way. Renovation of the existing
buildings
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 can be comparatively cheaper and easier.
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, it is an effective method as it could cost less and take a lesser time than starting from a
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scatch
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.
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,it would require
a much lesser resources
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much lesser resources
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 in terms of money and people.
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,when public
buildings
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 are newly constructed,there can be innovative features and updated architecture.
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 with,newly constructed
buildings
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 will have
a
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proper planning as well as a proper layout which eventually leads to a more efficient building.
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,when it is
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new construction,people can make it even more attractive. To conclude,
i
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 believe that,ultimately,
construction
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the construction
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 of new
buildings
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 is a far better option than renovation.
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