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please describe your childfood memory related to your family.

#childfood #memory
An old proverb says: "Do not judge a book by its cover".
This
 means you should not judge
books
 - or people - solely by appearance.
However
,
this
 point might be more valid for people than for
books
. Usually,publishers do not want to disguise their
books
. Whether it is a detective story, a sword and sorcery story, or literary fiction, they want each book on the shelf to tease and tempt the reader. In many ways, we judge
books
 by their covers every day. They just want them to tease and tempt the readers. So, is the cover a reliable representation of the narrative that is inside? Maybe not.
However
, it often tells us what kind of story to expect. When I was young, I thought doing dishes
/
laundries
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laundry
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/
chores were nightmares. When I was young, I thought doing dishes
/
laundry
/
chores were nightmares. It seems trivial now,
infact
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in fact
, I even derive some pleasure from the chore. But when I was a child, I lived in utter terror of being asked to touch that horrible mess in the sink. I resented scrubbing pods. I hated the sensation of touching stray peas and rice in
gresy
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greasy
grey
 water.
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