Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extend do you agree?
Our feelings, thoughts, voids, and pains are presented through arts
such
as acting, music and painting namely a few
. Some Correct quantifier usage
apply
people
believe in the inappropriateness of letting artists openly show their thoughts and sentiments; the authorities are in charge of censorship. Nonetheless
, to me it seems pointless limiting
them; I believe liberating them lets the unsaid be told, helps the society grow and leads to a much Change the verb form
to limit
creative
community.
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more creative
Firstly
, as every one of us has undergone, some things in life cannot be explained in words since they are incapable of conveyance, so the transmission key is in hands of arts
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the arts
For instance
, I always had a lot to say whereas I never could, now that I am participating in acting classes, I feel much better as I have found ways to express my emotions. Moreover
, not everything is sayable; to faithfully deliver the message, more sophisticated tools are needed.
Additionally
, the more human beings keep their thoughts as
secrets, the more they fall behind and vice-versa; Change preposition
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that is
, blocking people
draws the
society to a halt Correct article usage
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meeting
opportunities. In the 21st century, the Change preposition
in meeting
third world
countries are the ones that have been restricting Add a hyphen
third-world
the
artistic Correct article usage
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people
for a long time. Furthermore
, innovativeness comes where no one is terrified of openness. Galileo showed us how
it was like to live in a reactionary regime as he discovered the global shape of the earth, dared to break the news, and how he confronted the suppressive consequences. Al-Hallaj, the Iranian mystic philosopher is another case in hand when said “I’m the truth” and was hanged mistaken for “I’m God.” To put it in a nutshell, even though some Correct word choice
what
people
find it unsuitable to allow artists to articulate, I am certain that no one has the right to circumscribe any creature; yet, it is not an absolutely implicit attitude.Submitted by maralkarimi48 on
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion