Some people think parents should supervise their children's activities closely, while others believe children should have more freedom. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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people
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children
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parents
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should
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children
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children
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they wanna be
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close
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children
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. Because many
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and
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their
parents
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a movie when
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freedom
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becoming shy or quiet due to
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children
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. Another point to consider is that others believe
children
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freedom
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should have
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more
freedom
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children
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will experience
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depression if
parents
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closely
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to their
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they wanna do their
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alone way and
thus
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of many
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will develop when
parents
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that needs for their
children
.
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, many
children
have become shy or quiet and unfortunately , shy person or quiet person will be in their work life if
parents
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parents
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children
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therefore
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live
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trouble
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shy or
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quiet in
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their schools and
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due to the pressure of
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