Some people think international news is more important while some think local news is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some
people
thinks
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that global
news
is
important
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than that local
news
. In
this
current era, we
people
growing
by
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widespread
not
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,not
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in only one particular country. Nowadays, with the help of
internet
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the internet
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knowing
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world
news
easily.
Comparitively
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Comparatively
as earlier
news
can spread
every
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to every
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corner of the world.
However
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news
will
educates
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educate
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people
, to know what is going oNewsn
surrounded
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surrounding
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by
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you
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them
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.
Firstly
, international
news
is important to know what is going on
by
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in
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our neighbour countries.
Such
as weather conditions, wars,
innovations
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and innovations
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like
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apply
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. If our countries can help to them whether they are needed.
Besides
that sports and business will help to become more competitors.
Secondly
, we should aware
what
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of what
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is going on in our
location
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locations
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, states or regions.
This
will
more
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be more
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helpful to our daily lives. Region
news
will help us to know the government introducing new rules or implementations, as well
people
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as people
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acknowledge how their
unions
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union's
unions'
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effective
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are effective
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changing in their life. Local
news
always provides severe weather changes and
explict
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explicit
conditions. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
news
not
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is not
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to determine
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determined
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by Global and local.
News
always educates us to know something else.
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