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overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem what are the causes of this ?how can this problem be solved?

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It has been observed that more and more
people
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in
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metropolitan
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the metropolitan
a metropolitan
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area
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;
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,
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developed
devloped
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developed
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area
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are became
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 overcrowded. There are several factors and remedies for
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 an issue. Both the aspects are elaborated
in
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ensuing
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 with, big cities became unhealthy for survival.
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words
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people
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countinisly
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countings
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better
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a better
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 lifestyle because
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developed
devloped
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developed
 cities not only give good
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animates
animites
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animals
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 give well education
for
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 children.
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,
devastation
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the devastation
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 of
green
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the green
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 environment
in
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apply
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increase
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 pollution. To
elaborced
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elaborate
elaborated
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high
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 demand
of
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 living place
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 flats,
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bangles
bangloes
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those
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are getting population and congestion it
create
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 difficulty to
breath
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,
as a
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result
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 most
of
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people
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the people
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 are suffering some disease
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 asthma, cancer and many more. In
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order
oder
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order
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situation
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 some steps can be taken.
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Firstly
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Fristly
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Firstly
, developing backward
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area
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. By
i
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means
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 that
,
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 the government should take action towards undeveloped cities,
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, the authority should be improved some
aminities
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amenities
 like water supply,
road way
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roadway
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 and
also
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 Improve
eduction
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education
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 sector for children despite of
entrepreneus
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entrepreneurs
 be motivated and Commercial sector provide employment and work
oppurtinities
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opportunities
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therefore
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people
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 do not migrate from one
Place
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place
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 to another place. In conclusion, migration
are
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is
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reducing some greenery and
spread
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spreading
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 disease; It has to be controlled before
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further
futher
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further
 delay . It is crucial to improve
undeveloped
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the undeveloped
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area
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. A nation can be
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developed
develope
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developed
 when every habitat will be having enough facilities and
basics
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 needs.
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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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