Some people believe that unpaid community activity service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children.) To what extent do you agree or degree?

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service,

such

as working for

charity

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a charity

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, improving

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the neighborhood

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neighborhood

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teaching

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sports to younger children, among others.,

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always been a great way to teach younger people how important is

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society

. In the same way,

consequently

this

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essential

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task is promoted in many developed places,

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States, Japan,

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Corea, among many others. In the following

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we are going to assess whether making compulsory unpaid

community

service for high school people is positive or,

otherwise

, negative for

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society

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, on the one hand, we should agree with the fact that doing

community

activities is always positive and

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essential

esential

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essential

anywhere. It is good because of many reasons, which are so countless that would not fit in

this

text.

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this

type of work is

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necessary

necesary

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necessary

for any people's land because it sure helps to create

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taking care thought for our own stuff.

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, we must realize

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the fact that there are not numerous teenagers that enjoy doing obligatory

community

service.

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, we can agree that it is better to do it voluntarily (and not compulsorily) because if the work is done through obligation, teenagers will not reach care for

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society

, but

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. To conclude, we should agree with the fact that even though the youngers do not wish to

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collaborate

colaborate

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collaborate

, we, as

society

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, must promote their participation in those types of unpaid

works

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as long as it is taken as a hobby and not as a compulsory activity. It must be elaborated

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that way because if

this

labor

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is done compulsorily without giving them explications, the youngers could get angry and hate the system.

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Some people feel that learning a foreign languageis an essential component of a child's education. Others feel that learning a foreign language is often a waste of time that can be better spent on learning technologyand other vocational subjects.

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.