Topic 6: Economic progress is one way to measure the success of one country, while some people think there are other factors. What other factors should be considered? Within these factors, do you think anyone is more important than the others?
İt is considered by some
people
that economic progress is one
way to measure
the success
of one
country
, while some people
think there are other factors
. İn my opinion , there are a few ways such
as the education
level of a country
or the environmental situation of a country
to measure
the success
of one
country
. On the one
hand , according to me , it can be certainly said within these factors
, nobody is more important than the others .
Firstly
, there are a few ways such
as the education
level of a country
or the environmental situation of a country
to measure
the success
of one
country
. İf a country
has a good education
or a good environment in the best way the country
is Add an article
a success
success
over the other Replace the word
successful
countries
.Many people
who live in the
poor Correct article usage
apply
countries
still experiencing
due to these Wrong verb form
experience
countries
don't have a good education
or good environment . For instance
, the community of the
these Remove the article
apply
countries
struggle with death due to bad environments or they struggle with guilty young people
due to bad education
Secondly
, in my opinion , nobody is not
more important than the others . İf Rewrite the sentence
apply
aynone
will be Correct your spelling
anyone
one
leader in a country
, the country
will struggle many troubles such
as dies , quailties
, wars , and Correct your spelling
qualities
thus
this
country
will be a war area . For instance
, many people
who lived in Germany saw Adolf Hitler as one
leader in their country
. Therefore
, many wars took place on the earth and afterwards, many people
lost their life due to this
choice .
İn conclusion , there are a few ways such
as the education
level of a country
or the environmental situation of a country
to measure
the success
of one
country
. Many country
can be Change to a plural noun
countries
Correct your spelling
successful
succesful
thanks to these Correct your spelling
successful
factors
and also
, these factors
provide the highest rights of the country
. On the one
hand , nobody is more important than the others , and therefore
many wars can be stoppable .Submitted by atescagdas826 on
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