Topic 6: Economic progress is one way to measure the success of one country, while some people think there are other factors. What other factors should be considered? Within these factors, do you think anyone is more important than the others?

İt is considered by some
people
that economic progress is
one
way to
measure
the
success
of
one
country
, while some
people
think there are other
factors
. İn my opinion , there are a few ways
such
as the
education
level of a
country
or the environmental situation of a
country
to
measure
the
success
of
one
country
. On the
one
hand , according to me , it can be certainly said within these
factors
, nobody is more important than the others .
Firstly
, there are a few ways
such
as the
education
level of a
country
or the environmental situation of a
country
to
measure
the
success
of
one
country
. İf a
country
has a good
education
or a good environment in the best way the
country
is
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success
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over the other
countries
.Many
people
who live in
the
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poor
countries
still
experiencing
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due to these
countries
don't have a good
education
or good environment .
For instance
, the community of
the
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these
countries
struggle with death due to bad environments or they struggle with guilty young
people
due to bad
education
Secondly
, in my opinion , nobody is
not
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more important than the others . İf
aynone
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anyone
will be
one
leader in a
country
, the
country
will struggle many troubles
such
as dies ,
quailties
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qualities
, wars , and
thus
this
country
will be a war area .
For instance
, many
people
who lived in Germany saw Adolf Hitler as
one
leader in their
country
.
Therefore
, many wars took place on the earth and afterwards, many
people
lost their life due to
this
choice . İn conclusion , there are a few ways
such
as the
education
level of a
country
or the environmental situation of a
country
to
measure
the
success
of
one
country
. Many
country
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can be
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successful
succesful
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successful
thanks to these
factors
and
also
, these
factors
provide the highest rights of the
country
. On the
one
hand , nobody is more important than the others , and
therefore
many wars can be stoppable .
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