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Living in big cities is bad for health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#cities #health
İt is considered by some
people
 that living in big
cities
 is bad for
health
. I completely agree with the opinion . İn my opinion , bad gases
such
 as carbon dioxide and neon can be bad for
health
 in big
cities
 due to
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the
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use
a
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of a
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car
 or the
health
 of
people
 can affect badly in big
cities
 due to
unemployment
.
Firstly
 , big
cities
 have more
people
 than other small
cities
 ,and
thus
this
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situation
stuation
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situation
 is becoming more crowded .
People
 generally prefer
to
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their vehicles
such
 as
car
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cars
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,
bicycle
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bicycles
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,
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or boat
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boat
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boats
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for travel or
job
 . Unfortunately , these vehicles reveal bad gases ,
afterwards
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 these gases affect badly for human
health
 .
For instance
 , Los Angeles has
an
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apply
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eight million humans in
the
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apply
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America and everybody who lives in Los Angeles generally uses
to
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apply
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their
car
 for
job
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jobs
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 or travel , and
thus
the
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apply
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global warming increased in the world . Another point to consider is that many presidents who are in the big
cities
 live many troubles because
unemployment
 increases gradually in the big
cities
 . Everybody who
live
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lives
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 in the big
cities
 wanna have
the
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a
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job
 right , and
thus
 they apply for jobs .
Therefore
unemployment
 takes place in the big
cities
 . On the one hand ,
people
 which are
unemployment
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unemployed
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 be
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stress
strees
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stressed
due to came pressure from their families , and
therefore
the
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apply
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job
 right can't be given to these
people
 who live
this
 problem .
Also
 , these
people
 who are
stress
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stressed
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 begin
struggle
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to struggle
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 with some bad things like cancer and depression .
For instance
 , a man who is
unemployment
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unemployed
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struggle
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struggles
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 with cancer due to
unemployment
 in the big
cities
 . İn conclusion , in my opinion living in big
cities
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,cities
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 is bad for
health
 because
people
 who live in the big
cities
 affect badly due to
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the use
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use
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using
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a
Change preposition
of a
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car
 or
use
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using
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 any vehicle in the world .
On the other hand
 ,
people
 who live in the big
cities
 struggle with much trouble
such
 as cancer and depression .
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