Many people say that globalization and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. Find the sample answer to this question

Globalization and international
companies
have an impact throughout the world and
therefore
on the environment. But it is important to comprehend the reasons.
This
essay will discuss and provide examples
about
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this
topic. I would like to start off by saying that some multinational
companies
are working with a few
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equipment
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that
are
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making smoke and contamination
in
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different cities globally.
This
is affecting
population’s
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health and along with that bringing certain diseases to
people
nearby. To eradicate
this
issue the government has implanted a lot of regulations so
companies
will have to follow a protocol to avoid spreading gas or pollution to the near cities and
people
around
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besides
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the exposure to dangerous chemicals to the workers and environment.
For instance
,
companies
,
such
as MultiChoice, McWilliams and Cogroup are realising programs to support
this
fact and use their names as
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to the other
companies
which can boost the possibilities of contamination and damage to the atmosphere. Despite
of
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this
assistance,
government
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needs to continue working to add more multinational
companies
and work together to improve our environment so
people
can live without any concern
regarding
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and
this
will benefit the health of the population. In conclusion, some multicultural
companies
are working
with
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no all the sanitary regulations and
this
is causing diseases and possible death of
people
,
for example
, elderly
people
or some kids, to avoid
this
issue government is creating campaigns and strongly supervising them to avoid the grow of
this
inconvenience and guarantee a better quality of life.
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