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Working from home, some think as beneficial some people think it may distract the family routine. Discuss both views and what is your opinion?

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After COVID-19, there are so many
people
 who get the opportunity to
work
 from
home
, which
was
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is
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 really beneficial for women who have their kids at
home
. Some argue that
having
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working
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work
 from
home
is help
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helps
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 to increase the stress between family members,
while
 others think that it makes their life easier because there is no need to travel for
work
. I am going to scrutinize both aspects in
further
 paragraphs before forming any opinion.
To begin
 with, on the one side of the coin, it eradicates travel
time
 and cost for both employer and employees, which they can put into their business to grow more. Another reason is that, if they are in any other country, they can connect easily via the internet without affecting their workflow.
In addition
 to that, women with their kids can easily take care of them
while
 working.
Moreover
,
people
 can launch their businesses worldwide, because they use social media platforms.
For instance
, in the
last
 2 ,year there has been significant growth in online businesses with considerable income. On the flip side of the coin, some think totally opposite that having business
work
 at
home
 can break their daily routine and interrupt their day-to-day life. The primary reason for
this
 notion is that when
people
 start working from
home
, some employers start taking
benefit
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benefits
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 from their workers as when their employees are
on
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off duty they just ping them for small
work
 which disturbs their family and friend
time
. Lack of proper knowledge about the internet world is another reason because sometimes
people
got
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 stuck in their
work
 and there is no one for their help afterwards they have to spend more
time
 to get a solution for the problem. In conclusion,
according to
 me, working from
home
 has numerous benefits rather than drawbacks. So if we
work
 with proper
time
 management
then
 it is cost and
times effectively
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time-effective
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.
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task response
Ensure to address all parts of the essay prompt in depth. Make sure to clearly present arguments for both sides, provide examples or evidence, and clearly state your opinion at the end.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow and connection between different parts of the essay. Use transitional phrases to link ideas and ensure a clear progression of thoughts from one paragraph to the next.

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