Many different countries have most shops and products as the same. Some consider it a positive development, whereas others consider it negative. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Nowadays, globalization has affected demand and supply to a large
extend
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, making everything available around the globe at ease.
As a result
, there are many similar establishments and commodities that are available in many different
countries
. Some consider
this
as
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a positive
development
while
others think
this
is negative. In my opinion,
this
is a positive
development
as well as
negative
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a negative
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development
. On the one hand, having similar
shops
and
products
in two or more different
countries
is beneficial for the tourists.
While
travelling, many people
specially
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vegetarians or vegans are concerned about what they will eat in a foreign nation.
Therefore
, they sometimes choose only those
countries
to visit where they can find their choice of
food
,
as a result
,
affecting
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tourism
of
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other nations.
For instance
, when I visited Thailand, I made sure to check beforehand whether there is a chain of Indian
food
restaurant
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restaurants
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and suggested my friend to visit Thailand for the same reason too.
Therefore
, it is important to have some
similarity
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similarities
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in
food
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the food
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industry globally to promote
tourism
in the country.
On the other hand
, some people believe
this
is a negative
development
as it will result in
lack
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a lack
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of variety of
products
or
shops
in a different country.
For example
, many people travel to Dubai for the purpose of shopping. If they can shop for the same
products
in India the
tourism
for Dubai will be hindered.
Furthermore
, many
countries
’ GDP is dependent on revenue from
tourism
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the tourism
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industry.
Therefore
, it is important that there is variety in
collection
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the collection
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of clothes in
shops
of
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in
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different
countries
. In conclusion, I believe it is very important to have
similarilies
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similarities
in
food
shops
and differentiation in clothing
products
globally .
Therefore
, it is both a positive and a negative
development
for the
countries
.
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