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In the future, all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think te advantages of driverless vechicles outweigh the disadvantages.?

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These days, it has become a prevalent phenomenon that vehicle manufacturers produce some no
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 and it become
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, thanks to the advancement of technology under globalization. I believe that the drawbacks of
this
 trend are outweighed by its benefits. On the one hand, one of the most significant
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the
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disadvantages of
this
 development is that the career of
driver
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 is become over.
This
 will
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 more
driver
worker
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workers
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,
such
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driver
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drivers
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 and train
driver
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drivers
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, as they need to change their career to
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suit
sight
to
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this
 trend.
However
, most of the drivers are not graduated
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higher
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 degree, so they are difficult to
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 their
job
.
Moreover
, it is a huge amount of
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driver
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 in the world,
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it
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this
 might happened in a while, the
job
 market could not
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 all
job
seeker
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seekers
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 who
are
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 losing their
driver
job
.
On the other hand
, there are significant advantages it can bring to
people
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. Probably the
first
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 popping in mind is that it means that
people
 have the
oppuntunity
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opportunity
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this
 automatic system to
driving
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 a long trip. A striking illustration is that
people
 who
living
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 in a bigger nation,
such
 as
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 Kingdom or Japan,
people
 who need to
travelling
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in
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 a long trip
with
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 their car,
they
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do not worry more about they need to draw their attention
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a
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 whole trip, it may benefit them to take a little rest in a while. To illustrate
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, automatical vehicle
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use
 in
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 car, it is very valuable to the
driver
use
 it. I would
therefore
 argue that
although
 there are disadvantages of the current trend to
use
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 driving system, they are outweighed by the advantages, It can enrich
people
's lives and lives of the
people
 in the countries
that
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bigger
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 nation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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