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some people think that only electric cars should be allowed on the road by 2040. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #cars #road
There is a small population which has started to move their thoughts towards electric car introduction on roads. I believe, that
this
 should be implemented, as soon as possible, concerning the major pollution generated by the fueled vehicles.
Firstly
, the entry of power chargedwagon on the streets will enable to reduce the growing pollution level of various countries. The reduced use of petrol and diesel vehicles running on the highways
,
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 will substantially become less, resulting in
reduction
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of
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 air pollution.
Although
, the cost of charged auto is high as compared to
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 bus,
on the contrary
, allowing
such
 cars will
also
 improve the overall environment and
general
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 public will be able to breathe clean and good quality air. After all,
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life is to be valued much more than money. Many car manufacturers are in the process of introducing chargeable
wagon
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 for the betterment of
masses
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.
In addition
, there are several other benefits of electrically-
poweredride
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powered ride
 being brought in. The gasoline supply can be used for generating additional power supply for homes. There is
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 shortage of electricity, and
every day
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 load shedding is hampering
lot
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 of essential work of
corporates
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 offices and working people. Shortage of electricity at homes
are
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 majorly caused due to gas supplies being short with
majority
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 of governments of various nations. Usage of
electric
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the electric
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 run
van
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, will save
lot
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 of fuel empowering countries to generate more power, and providing electricity to a number of homes. In conclusion, the
travelers
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,
general
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 public,
a
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number of
who
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 think that electric
wagon
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 should be admissible by 2040 are right
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in numerous
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innumerous
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 ways, and I, support
this
 thought as it will bring huge changes the society making a difference to each individual.
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