Intelligent machines such as robots are widely applied to take the place of human beings. Please discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

The graph illustrates information and data about the number of
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memberships
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between men and
women
during
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1980 to 2010. Overall
membership
between men is more fluctuations
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whereas
in
women
is less various and more stable. The number of
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In 1980 was merely 1000 and followed by two pics it reached
to
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3000(highest peak in
women
) approximately and
then
in 2000 it underwent
downward
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trend and decreased to almost 2000 and levelled off. The
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men's
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mens
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men's
figure was more
fluctioted
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fluctuated
and in 1980 the number of
membership
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was around 2000 and it rose dramatically to 4000 in 1985 and after a slight
fracture
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it dwindled abruptly to 1,500 and the in 2005 experienced the biggest surge between all figures in
this
period and
increast
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increased
increase
shaprply
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sharply
to 5000
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wich
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which
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is the biggest surge between all category and
then
it sharply decreased to under 1000 in 2010
wich
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which
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is the lower rate in
given
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period. Overall the graph showed
membership
between men and
women
are highly fluctuated
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and both have met
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functions
during 1980 and 2010.
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  • innovation
  • operational efficiency
  • precision
  • accuracy
  • hazardous
  • technological advancement
  • displacement
  • skill gap
  • accountability
  • privacy
  • economic inequality
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  • manual labor
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