Some people think that children should not watch telvision as it has negative effects while some people believe that they should watch television as it helps them in their future. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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There is no doubt that these days watching
television
is becoming increasingly popular and prominent
particularly
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for
kids
. It is often considered that the time
children
spend in watch
television
effects
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affects
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their attitude less than what they watch. I completely agree with
this
opinion and think that the material of what
kids
watch on
television
is much more important than the time they watch
television
. In
this
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am going to look into both
of
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views and draw
own
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my conclusion. In terms of
positive
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side, some people argue that depends on the thing that
children
watch on
TV
will make a significant effect on their
behavior
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is reasonable. the main reason given to support
this
claim is that
children
seek to gain
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knowledge and
educate
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faster from watching live things more than
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them direct information. To illustrate, Hung,
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leader
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researcher in the field of education, had done an experiment to decide what the main key influence the
children
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attitude. He brings 10 samples of
children
from different countries and
make
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them
to
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simulate a certain
behavior
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behaviour
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, the half of the sample watch
TV
and the other have a regular class. the results
shown
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have shown
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that the
kids
learn from watching
TV
more than
regular
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a regular
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class.
that is
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the way
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why
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way
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why
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it is
critical
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a critical
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issue to let
kids
watch any channel on
TV
. To sum up, I am so convinced that
what
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watching
on
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TV
is
significant
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more significant
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than the time spend
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watching because
the
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children
can learn faster from watching
TV
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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