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Some people think that work is the most important thing in a person's life. Without the success of a career, life becomes meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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meaning in
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 absolutely helps
people
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 with
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their
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their
lives
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. Some
people
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 believe that
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 meaning comes with
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 and success. I, personally, don’t agree with that statement and I’ll explain the reasons below.
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 of all,
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 isn’t just about being famous or having lots of money. Some
people
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 may, or even be able to enjoy their
lives
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 in the absence of cash or fame. Having a healthy and tightly bonded family is sometimes all we needed.
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,
career
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a career
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 is absolutely not the only thing that brings meaning to us. That’s the
first
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 reason why we can not say that
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meaning
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 isn’t dependent on career only.
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, we cannot say that everyone
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 the same advantages to get into a qualified job or sustain it. In many countries, there are
people
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 that have to look after their kids or relatives. Since they are not able to reach out to the
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opportunities
oppurtunities
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opportunities
 as much as others, it is hard to say that their
lives
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 are meaningless and their jobs are demeaning depending on their obligations. In fact, all
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matters
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 and are sacred. In a nutshell, you may think that a meaningful
life
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 is achievable only by advancing in a powerful position. In my opinion, a job isn’t the only thing that are labeling or defining our
life
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’s meaning. There are
people
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 who are happy and
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blissful
 with themselves without the
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status quo
status-quo
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