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The diagrams show the changes that have taken place in Pacific Railway Station since 1998. It is clear that the station has become more facilities over the years, and two new features can be seen in the
second
 diagram, a restaurant and a supermarket. According to the
first
 map in 1998, we can see that railway platforms were
on
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in
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 the upper right corner. When looking down, there were some stores, which
was
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were
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 cafe, shop and ticket office from left to the right respectively.
In contrast
, toilets were on the left side of
this
 map, surrounded by vacant lots.
 As can be seen from the
second
 diagram by now,
to
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the right side of
platforms
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the platforms
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have
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has
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 remained unchanged;
however
, there are added new platforms on the left of
this
 area,
where
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which
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 took the place of the toilets.
In addition
, there
are
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is
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also
 built a restaurant and two shops in the middle of the map. It is
also
 worth noting ticket office, with which a shop has been replaced has been increased
the
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in size. A supermarket has been constructed
on
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 the lower left corner of
this
 station.
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