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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into univerisity difficult. Do you agree or disagree.

#accessibility #univerisity
Because of the overall number of institutions, getting admission to a
university
 is relatively tougher than admission to elementary-level
education
.
However
, there are obstacles for low-income individuals to access higher
education
 in terms of their financial capacities.
People
 with lower incomes frequently have trouble obtaining
university
 degrees because of a lack of funding and family obligations. Higher
education
 is typically far too expensive, and few
people
 choose to
enroll
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 in
university
 programs. Many others found it impossible to afford the numerous tuition costs necessary to finish their
university
 degrees. Poor
people
 in Bangladesh choose
the
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very competitive public institutions, whereas wealthy
people
 attend private universities without hesitation because there is less rivalry and they can afford to pay excessively high tuition. Poor
people
 frequently had to choose between attending school and taking care of other essential requirements, which is another barrier to higher
education
 for them. Sometimes parents had to give up on
education
 early because they needed their kids to help out financially through earning. While children in wealthy homes are given access to all the resources they need to finish their
education
. Because they are supported by their families, students from wealthy backgrounds do not have to shoulder any additional household duties and are
therefore
 more likely to be admitted to top colleges.
Although
 there are many poor
people
 who succeed in higher
education
 despite all the obstacles, there is a significant disparity in the proportion of low-income students admitted to universities compared to high-income students. Even those with exceptional merit are unable to continue their higher
education
 in institutions due to a lack of funding.
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